I've just finished the rough-sh draft of my first chapter(:! It's exactly 1985 words long, which is kind of perfect for me since I don't want super long chapters. It's up on WoP, and I really would love to know what you think.
http://www.worthyofpublishing.com/chapter.asp?chapter_ID=47932
My day is complete (:
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Okay, i just finished reading it.
ReplyDeleteFirst off, i love it! Haha. Especially Carter, and no, its not the name, i just have a really big soft spot for guy best friends. :D
Uhh, you know its titled Blood Splattered FLeathers right now right? Fleathers.... i thought it was Feathers. But i might be wrong? am i wrong? I dont think im wrong... haha.
Also, the first paragraph starts off really good, great attention grabber, but you step inot the acrion way too fast. I kind of felt like i was just getting into the story and realizing who im reading about and where she is, then the plot is there jumping into the mix. Its a bit overwhelming, so you might want to add a bit more onto the scene befroe she sees him.
There were a couple of gramatical mistakes, i'd have to go back and re-read it to point them out, btu they aren't very serious.
All in all, i really like it! :D
-K
I meant "step into the action" Haha. Me= horrible typer. :(
ReplyDeleteThankyou for checking it out((((:
ReplyDeleteHaha, woops, I've changed it now, thanks for pointing it out ;P.