I just ripped apart my first chapter! :D
Now it's chapters two, three, and twelve. Yes, twelve. Well, according to the time line it's twelve, but it could be thirteen or fourteen easily. ;)
So, now, I have to completely rewrite number one. And I'm kind of excited! Once I finish that, at some point, I need to go through and make the other stuff make sense in their new chapters... :S
BUT I have a semi-excerpt if anyone cares to read it?? No, it isn't from chapter one. Hahaha, anymore. ;)
Hmm? Yes? Okay! It's not completely editted, but I have done some so it isn't too horrible. D:
GONE!
You like? :)
Uhmm..... YES!? Freaking YES! Hahaha. I love it. Haha. And now im going to read it again!
ReplyDelete:D Yes!
ReplyDelete:):):):):)
Well you know me, the cold critic.
ReplyDeleteYou've shut down the critic. As you would shut down any other critic that has read your work. As a bloke would say, this was bloody brilliant. You got style in your writing diffrent from the masses, you've got the talent.
Hahahah, thank you. :)
ReplyDeleteI had kind of figured you would rip it apart. :P
Oh my god. I just had a readinggasam (what O_O?). That was like woah, and I'm being completely honest. I did see a 'He' instead of 'her' once or twice though, but that's nothing. This is fucking fantastic.
ReplyDelete(I don't normally swear around anyone, but I felt like that was the only way I could express myself).
ReplyDeleteThanks. :)
ReplyDeleteAnd I was reading it earlier and I notice that, so I'll fix it today. ;)